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Lesson 4

The Snail and the Whale 


The outcome for the unit: Write the story from a different animal’s viewpoint

LO: To write a short narrative.


Learning – PLAN

Questions to ask

Success Criteria

Spelling and grammar: formulating questions


Use day 4 pdf with plan


  1. Explain to the children that they are going to write an eye-witness account of the beaching of the whale today.
  2. They are writing it as the local police would like a full report of what happened on that day.
  3. Ask the children to recap/recall the main events spoken about in previous lesson.
  4. Encourage the children to retell the events in order using sequential language, for example: yesterday, next, then, afterwards, finally. Model this first.
  5. Explain to the children that they need to add interesting details to their recount to ensure that the reader understands how scary and exciting the event was. They construct the events using the ordering words to structure their eye witness account.
  6. Through modelled and shared writing, compose a recount orally rehearse sentences before writing.


Today you will be writing a report about the event on the beach yesterday for PC Benjamin.


At regular intervals, encourage children to re-read sections of their text to check it makes sense and make simple revisions. Support them in doing this and ask children to read their finished draft to someone at home.


They can then revise and edit these.



Police questions:


What happened yesterday?

At what time did this happen?

How did the speedboats get you on the sand?

Why didn't you just swim away from the shore?

When did you get stuck?

How did your skin feel?

Were there any other witnesses?


I can write in role - use I.


I can say how the whale was beached


I can say what happened after the whale was beached


I can use the past tense - use ed.


I can use language from the story.


I can write about how the whale felt.



Remember to:

use different sentence starters.


read your work again to check that it makes sense.


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